In a beautiful land far away there lived a couple whose names were Miemun and Khojisteh. They were happily married and their joy radiated down like the sun onto every person they encountered. These two were inseparable and thought nothing could ever tear them apart. But life happens as it always does and about three years down the road Khojisteh decided that their family and her happiness was incomplete without a child. They tried for almost two years and went to every doctor in the country, but still without success. There was still love between them but the clouds had started to roll in and they felt like they were trapped in the middle of a storm of uncertainty and heartache. Miemun was hesitant about being a father, but he loved Khojisteh so dearly wanted so much to make her happy that he would do anything to try and ease the hurt.
One day when he went to the market place, he saw the most magnificent bird his eyes had ever beheld and he thought that might just be the thing to take Khojisteh's mind off their worries, if only for a moment. He went to the man who was selling the parrot to inquire about how much the bird cost. The man said he would give Miemun a deal because he seemed so sad and only charge him a thousand huns for the parrot, but this seemed like an excessive amount for a bird so Miemun decided against it. However when he turned around to leave, he heard a sing-songy voice cry out praises to him and foretell promises of great fortune if Miemun would only buy him and take him home to be a part of his family. At his point he was desperate for a miracle so Miemun took a chance and paid the man for the parrot and took him home to surprise Khojisteh.
Khojisteh was delighted by Miemun's surprise of the parrot, mostly because it was his way to show how much he cared for her; little did she know what was in store for them both. The parrot adored his new home because he was so loved by Miemun and Khojisteh and finally after six months of being with them, he decided that it was time to tell them his secret. He gathered them together and began the story of how he used to be the traveling companion of a free genie. It took quite some time to tell all the adventures they had experienced together, but the point of the story was that before the genie left to go to another planet he left the parrot with one wish. The parrot could use the wish himself or give it to someone he loved. After finding his forever home with Miemun and Khojisteh, he knew that he would give them his wish so that they could cure their infertility issues. The couple was so overjoyed that they fell to their knees and wept. They could now have the family they had been so fervently longing for.
Author's Note:
So in the original story there were no infertility issues with Miemun and Khojisteh, I added that in to give more complexity to the story but they were an incredibly happy couple in both stories. In the original story the parrot foretells something that helps Miemun in a business deal and makes him money. I wanted their bond with the parrot to be based on more than money. I also added in the part about the genie and the wish.
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Savannah- I really like this story, I think it's cute and heartwarming. I think it's interesting how you tied it into the original story through your author's note. I think that the story could've possibly been developed a little more through the use of conversation instead of just description. Perhaps it'd be useful to do that in the future. However, I really like the story and I think it's put together really nicely!
ReplyDeleteHey Savannah! I really like your story! I always enjoy a story with a happy ending! I also like that the parrot decided to use his wish on people he cared about rather than keeping it for himself. Overall, it was pretty short, but the content was great! I like how you incorporated the genie and made the parrot a real character in the story rather than a means to attain money!
ReplyDeleteGreat twist to the story Savannah! You had some great elements, much like you said in your author's note. Utilizing the parrot's relationship with Miemun for more than just money and adding in infertility issues. Those are key components in the struggles in life. And adding in the genie and the wish reminded me a lot of Aladdin, so it also lightened up the story aside from the infertility issues. Great job!
ReplyDeleteGreat job with this story, Savannah! I actually read the same source for my story last week so it was really cool to see your take on it by adding the infertility plot. I thought that was really well done and thought out because it gave Miemun a legitimate reason for seeking out a miracle, which turns out to be the parrot. My heart ached for them too when they were unable to have children but I'm so glad that the parrot was able to cure all of their issues in his new home and that they all lived happily ever after! Something that might be interesting would be to explain the stories of the parrot and the genie so that readers can understand just how long it took to tell the story. Just a thought! Overall, I really enjoyed reading this!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story, Savannah! I think you did a great job by adding the infertility twist to make the story a little more meaningful than the original. I thought you introduced the story really well by making it relatable to the readers, because life does tend to get in the way for a lot of people every now and then. Having the parrot be the solution of their issues was a great idea, but I wasn't expecting it to be able to give them a child. Well done!
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